Some Examples of Catchy Introductions
(From the book Essays that Worked for College Applications)
Your introduction to your college essay should grab your readers’ attention immediately. Here are a few options for how to do that.
Put the reader in your scene:
He is the strangest person I have ever met, not simply eccentric, truly strange. He stumbled into my life (or rather I into his) the day Oma took me into that laundromat. With the wind at my back, I flew through the doors into a room of sticky, moist air that vibrated with the hum of a dozen different cycles.
Last Thursday was my father’s birthday. I was standing on the sideline at my soccer game, shivering in the cold October drizzle, when suddenly I remembered. He would have been 53.
Begin with a short, intriguing statement:
Misconceptions–I hate them. Although they will always exist, I will still fight my private little war against them and especially against one that concerns me directly. During my travels in the summer, I always meet interesting people and attempt to make new friends. However, one common bond ties all of these strangers together: fallacious thoughts about my city.
My adventures as Donut Boy started this summer. I wanted to work in a book or record store, but even the ones that gave me applications demanded experience.
Set an interesting context:
Several years ago, I faced the toughest internal struggle of my life thus far.
I had been going to a Christian school for several years; the students went to Bible classes and were preached to regularly by the faculty. Most other kids were Christian; I was, from birth, a Jain. At first, the difference was unnoticeable. Others didn’t really care that I was different and never really made me feel sensitive about my ethnic differences.
My family gives advice, discussion, argument and thought, but never orders. I was never pushed to become an olympic athlete, a great artist or genius. My family felt that it was not their role to decide who I was to become; with only their input I was left to decipher the world with my own eyes, make my own judgments and decide for myself what I would become.
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